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Subject: Writing a Halo short story

Let the big man do his thing.

It's the first thing I have ever ritten really other than stuff for school. Have a read tell me what you think. This is it to date.

http://www.wattpad.com/1508579-halo-bone-marrow

its based arounf a game of invasion on bone yard, hence then name. Give it a read tell me what you think so far.

  • 06.04.2011 7:52 PM PDT
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Posted by: NightFalcon117
It's the first thing I have ever ritten really other than stuff for school. Have a read tell me what you think. This is it to date.

http://www.wattpad.com/1508579-halo-bone-marrow

its based arounf a game of invasion on bone yard, hence then name. Give it a read tell me what you think so far.



Linky.
Like it Btw.
Awesome how you develop the characters some.
Keep writing.

  • 06.04.2011 8:37 PM PDT

Tell em how I'm boss bro

  • 06.04.2011 9:48 PM PDT

Let the big man do his thing.


Posted by: chaptastic
Tell em how I'm boss bro

Il be sure to put that in ;D

  • 06.05.2011 7:13 AM PDT

Name's WIlliam,

For the love of God it's pronounced mister-shag, not misters-hag.

I don't normally ask for personal information, but how old are you? Sometimes you don't capitalize words at the beginning of sentences...

It's pretty good though: I like it.

Also, the word coloured is traditionally spelled "colored."

[Edited on 06.05.2011 9:46 PM PDT]

  • 06.05.2011 9:42 PM PDT

I'm a forger. I'm British. I love Halo.

Also, the word coloured is traditionally spelled "colored."

Not true, UK or British spell it like this: Colour and Americas spell it like this: Color. I know because I'm British :)

Anyway, nice start for the story. Hope to see it longer.

  • 06.06.2011 11:25 AM PDT

Name's WIlliam,

For the love of God it's pronounced mister-shag, not misters-hag.

@Lord shadowctr: Are all words that make the "or" noise spelled with an "our" in the UK? Like honor, misemeanor, or terror? Or is it specific to each word?

  • 06.06.2011 1:24 PM PDT

It's variable. Terror is terror. But honor is honour here.

  • 06.06.2011 1:27 PM PDT

I'm a forger. I'm British. I love Halo.

Wovlerfrog is right, only some words that you Americans spelt different from British. Like: Aeroplane (UK) to Airplane (US) or Mum(UK) to Mom (US)< maybe both :s

Its complex, search for American and British English spelling difference. For any who wonders about the difference between American and British language.

[Edited on 06.06.2011 1:55 PM PDT]

  • 06.06.2011 1:54 PM PDT

Let the big man do his thing.


Posted by: mistershag
I don't normally ask for personal information, but how old are you? Sometimes you don't capitalize words at the beginning of sentences...

It's pretty good though: I like it.

Also, the word coloured is traditionally spelled "colored."


Im 19 its a quick first draft thats why Im gonna edit this all after no worries and yeah im British so I am spelling it right :P

[Edited on 06.06.2011 5:08 PM PDT]

  • 06.06.2011 4:40 PM PDT

Name's WIlliam,

For the love of God it's pronounced mister-shag, not misters-hag.

Ok well that's interesting to know! Sometimes when I write fantasy short stories I find myself spelling "armor" armour, even though I was born and raised in the States. I guess some stories are just told better with British spellings! Keep up the good work, sers.

  • 07.30.2011 7:06 PM PDT

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Posted by: mistershag
Ok well that's interesting to know! Sometimes when I write fantasy short stories I find myself spelling "armor" armour, even though I was born and raised in the States. I guess some stories are just told better with British spellings! Keep up the good work, sers.
Haha, damn straight.

Good stuff. Just needs some slight fixing.

  • 07.31.2011 12:47 AM PDT

Keep it Clean.

I think I remember a Spartan in one of the novels balanced a knife on the end of his finger. I'm almost positive. It's pretty good, though. That minor detail just happened to catch my eye.

  • 08.01.2011 11:02 PM PDT