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Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 4: Sacrifice)

Foreword
Ive always been a good writer school wise, and always had idea I wanted to put into words. So I decided to attempt to write a story based in my favorite fictional Universe. I wanted a story that ties into the main events from the game, along with exploring some back/side story. AKA I want to be creative, but may step on the toes of cannon a bit. Some controversial ideas may be put in also. Ill try my best to research different aspects of the work, but that doesn't mean I'll see everything.

If you find issues in the cannon, please tell me. If you find any issues with my grammer (cwatididthar), please tell me. I try to check my work but that's not my forte unfortunately.

Also big thanks for OfTheBloodguard for his help. Hes practically a second author.


Chapters - Expect new chapter July 17th
Prolouge (end of this post)
Chapter 1: Desperado
Chapter 2: Counter Assault
Chapter 3: Checkmate
Chapter 4: Sacrifice

Prologue
"We got 5 minutes until we exit," Captain Talon announced, "Bring ship's weapons up to combat readiness. I don't want to chance any unexpected encounters."

"Affirmative captain, weapon systems coming online. Engines status green. Plasma Reactors green. Also we're entering the Earth system, why you worried captain?" Sergeant Decker replied.

"I dont know what to expect in these time," Came the reply

Captain Talon was commander of the UNSC Diligence, originally a shield ship, it had been through various modifications through the years. During the insurrections, it had been stolen by a rebel team, but sustained heavy damage on the escape. Lacking the parts for shield generating tech, they had replaced the shield systems and opted for a faster ship with slip-space capabilities.

During the beginning of the covenant-human war, it had sat in a warehouse on Reach obviously abandoned. The UNSC, in need of a heavy transport ship, had it refitted with new Covenant based plasma generator tech. An old rebel ship had become one of the fastest in the fleet. Although limited on firepower, it did its mission by transporting heavy supplies, and often classified materials to their destination.

The crew had as interesting a story as the ship. Captain Talon had practically grown up in the Navy, a career solider, and a natural leader. He was given control of the ship and the ability to choose his crew. First on his list was pilot Decker, a sergeant in the United Nation Navy, but one of the best pilots for the job. Talon and Decker had met each other on a frigate "Superior Might." Also from the frigate was an engineer Logan. After shipoard duties, he had been selected for ONI Scientific Section and had become the UNSC expert on covenant plasma generator tech, which was the main reason for the position.

Other members of the crew were Sandra, the co-pilot/navigator, who was picked up hours before the Diligence's first operation for her knowledge of flight and navigation. Another "particular" addition was Lieutenant Wade who was an ONI spook "technically" managing ground defense for the ship. He was in charge of 5 marines who considered themselves to have drawn the short straw and been assigned guard duty. The final addition to the ship was a "smart" AI, Hera, who manage all the technical duties on the ship.

"Exiting Slip Space in 30 seconds" Hera declared over the intercom.

Talon paced over to his view over Decker, Sandra, and the outside world. "Here we go."

The Diligence exited slip space over Earth. They had the authorization to be in the area. However, they were to come in quietly and hail the Cairo station with code words "You know the music." However, things would not go as plan since they exited at the worst possible time.

"Overwhelming comn chatter, monitoring," Hera reported, "Captain, it appears.... we're being targeted by a Marathon class cruiser"

"Evasive maneuvers, 60 degrees starboard NOW." Talon was settling into his captains chair and strapping in. What the Hell is going on were his only thoughts.

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[Edited on 07.04.2011 11:50 AM PDT]

  • 06.05.2011 8:13 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Prologue Up)

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  • 06.05.2011 8:40 AM PDT


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  • 06.05.2011 9:23 AM PDT

Nice job. Will be reading this.

A few grammatical errors though. An example: 'The crew had as interesting story as the ship.' But overall, good work.

  • 06.06.2011 12:46 AM PDT


Posted by: S p h 1 n X O 7
Nice job. Will be reading this.

A few grammatical errors though. An example: 'The crew had as interesting story as the ship.' But overall, good work.
Thanks alot.

Also I hope to be adding a new edition at least every two weeks, if not under a week. Depends on my schedule.

  • 06.06.2011 6:27 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 2: Counter-Assault)

Within Seconds, Diligence was banking right. The instantaneous reaction by Decker saved the ships life. An archer missile skimmed past the aft of the ship, and if not for classified ONI jamming tech would have locked on and killed the Diligence.

"Comn chatter shows a covenant armada has assaulted Earth." Hera was chattering,"We came in the midst of this battle and the UNSC has identified us as covenant."

"Hail that cruiser now, also Decker maintain evasive maneuvers." Talon was taking command when the resident ONI officer Wade ran in.

"What the hell is going on," were the first words out of his mouth followed by other various curses." As he stared at the various screens, he felt silent and grew tense.

Suddenly over the inter-comn came a new voice, "If your a UNSC ship, you better start explaining or ill be explaining why we put a MAC in your ship."

Talon was about to reply when Wade ran up to the speaker, pushed the captain out of the way and began to speak, "This is UNSC Diligence. Were an ONI transport ship carrying classified materials protected under act Title 11, Subtitle K, Section 173. We have access to this sector. State who you are or I will see personally to your demotion to ensign"

Brief silenced ensued, then came a strong reply, "This is fleet Admiral Harper of the UNSC home fleet, Africa orbital defense support. We were unsure of you affinity. We're reading plasma based signatures from your ship. Can you please explain why the hell we're getting these readings."

Talon looked at Wade and shook his head, then replied "We're using new plasma based generators, along with carrying three experimental plasma based M-145G Rhinos"

More silence then, "Can the rhinos be fired in an EVA operation?"

Wade dashed to the intercom again and replied, "They're experimental units, we dont have a damn clue on what they are capable or not capable of. They were to be tested down in Australia before things went to hell."

What Harper said next made the crew think he was insane."Well if we don't know what they can do, lets experiment. Get a team set up down in your cargo bay and be ready deploy a rhino. A few ships are out of range from our MACSs, and archer missiles aren't doing good. Since your behind the fleet and have plasma signatures, come up on one of the battle cruisers and hope they think your friendly. When your in a close proximity, open your bay, fire a shot or two then get the hell out. Then we'll finish them off."

Down in the crew area, the orders were received by the marines who thought their commander needed to be put in an asylum. They however prepped themselves for an EVA operations. One of the Rhinos were also powered up, and was rolled up to the door along with receiving magnets to hold it to the ship. Back in the bridge Hera proclaimed the crew was ready and that in 2 minutes they would open the bay doors and be in optimal position.

The two minutes were the fastest of the crews life. In that span, the marines managed rig a power line to the rhino that would divert some plasma energy from the ship to the rhino. In the exact moment designated, the doors opened for the marines to enter the last frontier. Due to the design of the ship, the Rhino had to be driven down a ramp and unto a platform to be able to fire.

"Moving the rhino down the ramp" one of the marines reported on the intercom. The rhino slowly stammered down the ramp, with multiple wire dragging behind it. "Sir in position came the final call."

Back on the bridge Talon ordered all energy to be diverted to the rhino. Wade argued saying it would leave the ship immobile for a few precious seconds and possibly blow up the Rhino. Talon replied, "Until the marines get back in the ship, were dead in the water. We might as well try our best to take out that cruiser."

Right as they finished one of the marines reported, "Rhino firing in 3...2...1...Shot fired." The watched the super heated plasma fly through space at the covenant vessel. When it hit, shielding began to show, but then the shields popped. The signal for Harper's ships to fire were signaled from the bridge.

A frantic cry came over the radio, "Engine failure on the rhino, it over heated." Talon ordered the rhinos magnetic clamps to be removed and get rid of it as soon as possible, much to the disapproval of Wade. The clamps were removed and the debris started to float off into space. Meanwhile, the marines wasted no time getting back into the cargo bay and closing the doors.

Once the door closed, orders were given to buckle down. They were going to atmosphere to aide in the unfolding disaster. They were dropping into hell.


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  • 06.11.2011 6:14 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 1: Desperado)

Hold it right there.

Hello. Name's Brian. Look, if you're looking for a flame war with me, just open up the Flood and write up some not-nice things about religion and I'll bring my nukes to the party.

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[Edited on 06.12.2011 10:37 PM PDT]

  • 06.12.2011 10:37 PM PDT

Nice job man!

  • 06.13.2011 12:30 AM PDT

Nice job Steel!

I think you already got the grammar part from Sphinx, but other then that, not bad. Not bad at all.

[Edited on 06.13.2011 10:19 AM PDT]

  • 06.13.2011 10:17 AM PDT
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Bungie.net member Since 2001

"A hero need not speak. When he is gone, the world will speak for him"
"You are the last of your kind: bred for combat, built for war. You're the master of any weapon, pilot of any vehicle, and fear no enemy"

Amazing job! I'll read the rest later.

  • 06.13.2011 6:57 PM PDT

Really nice. Beginning to enjoy this even more! Keep going!

  • 06.14.2011 3:10 AM PDT

Battle is the most magnificent competition in which a human being can indulge. It brings out all that is best; it removes all that is base. All men are afraid in battle. The coward is the one who lets his fear overcome his sense of duty. Duty is the essence of manhood.
-George S. Patton

Great story so far. Very imaginative!

  • 06.14.2011 8:40 PM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 3: Checkmate)

"Get that Rhino to the East side of the complex."

"Yes sir, but the amount of rubble will takes us a bit."

"Just get it done, we dont have much time."

Wade wasn't to happy about the current situation. Diligence was an ONI ship and they should have finished the mission ONI assigned: getting the rhinos down to Australia for testing. However Harper had ordered that the ship to assist in civilian evacuation of Mombasa, and Talon was more than happy to do comply.

Currently they were on the northern outskirts of Old Mombasa, were any remaining civilians had been moved to. The old city had partially been destroyed during the slipspace jump of Regret's carrier, but the new portion of the city was to hot for an evac site.

"Status report" Wade called over the inter-comn.

The reply came: Rhino 1 was in position, with the second one he just ordered to move to the East on the way. Teams Alpha, Charlie, Delta, and Foxtrot were stationed. Bravo team was repositioning due to a structures collapse, while Echo still hadn't reached its position.

The marines originally stationed on Diligence were managing the Rhinos, which the new model made room for a third person for increased targeting capabilities. Four of the squads were marines deployed late in the battle to help in this specific engagement. The other two, Alpha and Delta, were regrouped ODST that had landed in Old Mombasa after the drop-gone-wrong on Regret's carrier.

"Hawkeye, this is team Delta, covenant troops advancing from the south. Scouting party probably, consist of a wraith, two ghost, and about five infantry squads."

"Affirmative Delta," Wade replied. His code name was Hawkeye and he was the field commander of this op. "This is for real men. R1, link up with the Osprey and get a fix on that wraith. Delta, use your SPNKr on the ghost. Then mop up."

"Affirmative targeting wraith." "Affirmative also, waiting for Rhino." Came the replies.

23 seconds after the last transmition, the Rhino fired, hit its target and blew the Wraith into oblivion. Immediately following that, rockets were fired, one hitting its target. Then came various fire from two positions. The advancing troops were also in Charlie team's perimeter, causing an even quicker takedown.

The covenant, with a belly full of lead and a pool of their own blood to drown in, were all taken down mines a few grunts scattering in fear. However one ghost had survived, and was driving back in the direction it came. The scouting party had succeeded.

The next 15 minutes went without incident and large number of civilians were loaded on. A few banshees came a little to close and were shot down by anti-air turret the teams had set up. If they survived for another 15 minutes, they would be flying out of the area with a large number of civilians saved.

Talon was monitoring air traffic from the bridge, when suddenly multiple spots appeared on the edge of the display.
He immediately reported this to Wade, "We got multiple bogies coming in from the West."

Wade immediately replied, "Damn, I was hoping this would be easy. Reroute a few hornets to our position."

"I dont know if you realize this, but were at war, and all UNSC forces are engaged or retreating." Talon transmitted.

"Well get on the command net and tell them that if we dont get aircraft, Diligence wont be taking any civies out." Was Wades response. Dumbasses he though, no one was any help these days.


While Talon tried accessing the command net, Wade was hurrying to reposition the squads. Originally they had been stationed with a squad in each relative corner with two on the East and Southern sides. With the new contacts to the West, he reposition to reinforce the west side.

Suddenly 3 phantoms and a half a dozen banshees bore down from the West. The AA turret opened fire on the fire, managing to hit a phantom a few times causing it to crash. It managed to take down another banshee before getting hit. Now it was flaming and useless. The other phantoms proceeded to deploy there squads in the North corner, by Foxtrot team along with 2 wraiths.

One of the wraiths was hit by a Rhino. Other fell behind cover and proceed to fire upon the Foxtrots position. The other banshees began to perform strafing runs on the other groups, loosing two more to SPNKr missiles. One of the banshees hit went down on the west side, coming apart and scattering debris everywhere.

Immediately following that, a panic-stricken solider got on the radio, "This is Echo team, we got 1 man wounded, and 2 men KIA along with the captain. They're buried under debris from that banshee."

"Take the wounded and get out of there" Wade ordered.

"Vehicles advancing from the south," Another call came over the radio, "Multiple ghost and revenant along with two shadows"

It seemed the covenant were throwing a massive amount of troops at the UNSC force. It was enough proof to tell the men this was not going to be a quick and easy fight.

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  • 06.19.2011 6:02 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 2: Counter-Assault)

Did I spot a Johnson quote...

A few mistakes here and there, but enjoyable overall. More!

  • 06.19.2011 5:07 PM PDT


Posted by: S p h 1 n X O 7
Did I spot a Johnson quote...

A few mistakes here and there, but enjoyable overall. More!
indeed you did.

Damn, been trying to read over my works alot, but I dont seem to be succeeding.

  • 06.19.2011 8:56 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!


Posted by: Hayabusawarrior
Damn, been trying to read over my works alot, but I dont seem to be succeeding.
I can give you a hand if you want.

"Get that Rhino to the East side of the complex."East doesn't need a capital; it's a direction, not a place.

"Yes sir, but the amount of rubble will takes us a bit."I think you mean take us a bit to clear/get past.

"Just get it done, we dont have much time."An apostrophe for don't.

Wade wasn't to happy about the current situation.There should be two o's in too. You could possibly want to change the to their as well, but that's up to you.

Diligence was an ONI ship and they should have finished the mission ONI assigned: getting the rhinos down to Australia for testing.Diligence should be in italics, seeing it's a ship's name. Rhinos should have a capital, seeing it's a vehicle name.

Also, your sentence kind of lacks wording. ..."finished the mission that ONI assigned:" Maybe, if you were to put a few more words so it reads a wee bit like this: "...finished the mission that ONI had assigned them:" Or something. I'm not too sure on that one.

However Harper had ordered that the ship to assist in civilian evacuation of Mombasa, and Talon was more than happy to do comply.Comma after however, seeing it's a conjunction. And I think you should put a was in the sentence after ship, so it reads as follows: "...the ship was to assist in the civilian..."

Also, get rid of the do before comply.

Currently they were on the northern outskirts of Old Mombasa, were any remaining civilians had been moved to. The old city had partially been destroyed during the slipspace jump of Regret's carrier, but the new portion of the city was to hot for an evac site.where* too* (once again, two o's in too.

"Status report" Wade called over the inter-comm.There needs to be some sort of punctuation at the end of the spoken phrase. You need either a comma or an exclamation point. Comma if he isn't yelling, or exclamation point if he is.

The reply came: Rhino 1 was in position, with the second one he just ordered to move to the [/u]East on the way. Teams Alpha, Charlie, Delta, and Foxtrot were stationed. Bravo team was repositioning due to a structures collapse, while Echo still hadn't reached its position.Change with to and, and add a was between east (remember, east doesn't need a capital) and on. Team needs a captial, seeing it's part of a title/name, and structure's needs an apostrophe.

The marines originally stationed on Diligence were managing the Rhinos, which the new model made room for a third person for increased targeting capabilities. Four of the squads were marines deployed late in the battle to help in this specific engagement. The other two, Alpha and Delta, were regrouped ODST that had landed in Old Mombasa after the drop-gone-wrong on Regret's carrier.Change your sentence so it reads, "...managing the new model of Rhinos, which made room for a third person for increased targeting capabilites." There's more than one ODST you're talking about in your sentence. If there's more than one ODST, change it to ODSTs. Put a lower case s, seeing ODST is an acronym.

"Hawkeye, this is team Delta, covenant troops advancing from the south. Scouting party probably, consist of a wraith, two ghost, and about five infantry squads."Team needs a capital, seeing it's part of their squad name. Covenant needs a capital, seeing it's a name. Consist should be consisting. Wraith needs a capital, as does Ghost, seeing they're vehicle names.

"Affirmative Delta," Wade replied. His code name was Hawkeye and he was the field commander of this op. "This is for real men. R1, link up with the Osprey and get a fix on that wraith. Delta, use your SPNKr on the ghost. Then mop up."Only the one wee mistake here. Other than that, nice. You could use a comma after affirmative, though, but that's up to you.

"Affirmative targeting wraith." "Affirmative also, waiting for Rhino." Came the replies.Same deal here. Also, if your spoken phrase with something like this:

"...replied Hawkeye."

...then don't use a full stop, use a comma or something that fits the sentence. Also, the word following the spoken phrase (in this case, it's came) shouldn't have a capital.

23 seconds after the last transmition, the Rhino fired, hit its target and blew the Wraith into oblivion. Immediately following that, rockets were fired, one hitting its target. Then came various fire from two positions. The advancing troops were also in Charlie team's perimeter, causing an even quicker takedown.This could use some more descriptive wording, but I won't go into that unless you want me to.

The covenant, with a belly full of lead and a pool of their own blood to drown in, were all taken down mines a few grunts scattering in fear. However one ghost had survived, and was driving back in the direction it came. The scouting party had succeeded.Should be minus. I'm sure that was an accident though. Grunts needs a capital, so does Ghost.

The next 15 minutes went without incident and large number of civilians were loaded on. A few banshees came a little to close and were shot down by anti-air turret the teams had set up. If they survived for another 15 minutes, they would be flying out of the area with a large number of civilians saved.Banshees needs a capital. Turrets is a plural, so it needs an s at the end. That is, of course, if they set up more than one AA turret. If not, then you should place the word an before anti-air, so it reads: "...were shot down by an anti-air turret"...

Talon was monitoring air traffic from the bridge, when suddenly multiple spots appeared on the edge of the display.
He immediately reported this to Wade, "We got multiple bogies coming in from the West."


Wade immediately replied, "Damn, I was hoping this would be easy. Reroute a few hornets to our position."Hornets.

"I dont know if you realize this, but were at war, and all UNSC forces are engaged or retreating." Talon transmitted.Both highlighted words need apostrophes. Also, remember, no full stops at the end of the spoken phrase if you have something after it. Comma, or something more fitting.

And, while we're at it... you could use an either in your sentence, so it reads as follows: "...and all UNSC forces are either engaged or retreating!"

"Well get on the command net and tell them that if we dont get aircraft, Diligence wont be taking any civies out." Was Wades response. Dumbasses he though, no one was any help these days.For future reference, thoughts should be written in italics. Dumbasses needs a comma. And you've got a tense error too. If that's a continuation of his thought, then was is the wrong tense (past, not present.) You should use is instead. But if it wasn't, then don't use these days (that'd still be a tense error), just say, "No one was any help to him anymore."

While Talon tried accessing the command net, Wade was hurrying to reposition the squads. Originally they had been stationed with a squad in each relative corner with two on the East and ]Southern sides. With the new contacts to the West, he reposition to reinforce the west side.Repositioned some of his squads*

Suddenly 3 phantoms and a half a dozen banshees bore down from the West. The AA turret opened fire on the fire, managing to hit a phantom a few times causing it to crash. It managed to take down another banshee before getting hit. Now it was flaming and useless. The other phantoms proceeded to deploy there squads in the North corner, by Foxtrot team along with 2 wraiths.A comma after suddenly. Was that second fire that I highlighted supposed to be a different word? Apart from there needing to be changed to be their, the rest just needs more capitals.

One of the wraiths was hit by a Rhino. Other fell behind cover and proceed to fire upon the Foxtrots position. The other banshees began to perform strafing runs on the other groups, loosing two more to SPNKr missiles. One of the banshees hit went down on the west side, coming apart and scattering debris everywhere.Foxtrot's needs an apostrophe. And change "Banshees hit" to "Banshees that was hit".

Immediately following that, a panic-stricken solider got on the radio, "This is Echo team, we got 1 man wounded, and 2 men KIA along with the captain. They're buried under debris from that banshee."Capitals, my man.

"Take the wounded and get out of there" Wade ordered.Comma at end of spoken phrase.

"Vehicles advancing from the south," Another call came over the radio, "Multiple ghost and revenant along with two shadows"Dun need capital for another. If the same person picks up their sentence, it doesn't need a capital. For example: "Why hello there," said the boy, "what's your name?"

Ghosts and Revenants are plurals in your sentence, so they need an s at the end to show that. Also, Shadows needs a full stop after it, seeing it's the end of the sentence.

*continues next post*


[Edited on 06.20.2011 6:22 AM PDT]

  • 06.20.2011 6:20 AM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!

It seemed the covenant were throwing a massive amount of troops at the UNSC force. It was enough proof to tell the men this was not going to be a quick and easy fight.
And there we are. If you want me to help you with your next chapters, just send me a message before you post your next one and I can help proof read it.

[Edited on 06.20.2011 6:24 AM PDT]

  • 06.20.2011 6:21 AM PDT


Posted by: OfTheBloodguard
It seemed the covenant were throwing a massive amount of troops at the UNSC force. It was enough proof to tell the men this was not going to be a quick and easy fight.
And there we are. If you want me to help you with your next chapters, just send me a message before you post your next one and I can help proof read it.
lol, you just rewrote my entire chapter. Never realized I had so many errors, ill try to look out for them more and spend more time proof reading. Thanks bloodguard, and I will probably take up your offer on proofreading future chapters.

  • 06.20.2011 8:57 AM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!


Posted by: Hayabusawarrior
lol, you just rewrote my entire chapter. Never realized I had so many errors, ill try to look out for them more and spend more time proof reading. Thanks bloodguard, and I will probably take up your offer on proofreading future chapters.
Lol. I really tried not to change anything, honest. And sweet as. Just pay attention to your writing, most of your mistakes were really nothing at all.

  • 06.21.2011 2:17 AM PDT

Thanks for the advice. Ill keep it in mind.

  • 06.22.2011 6:33 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 4: Sacrifice)

Delta Team was having a hard time holding on to their position. With Echo Team out of the fight, they had the west and south corners, where the majority of the Covenant forces were coming from. However, they were dug in and had plenty of supplies. They had no squad-mates KIA, and only one injured. It wasn't fatal, just some shrapnel in his arm.

"Infantry advancing through that side road from the north. Jeff, drop them," the team leader Brison ordered.

"I see them," reported the team sniper Jeff. A few seconds later the Brutes, Jackals, and Grunts were dead. Upon taking out the only Brute, Jeff commented, "Ha, that one splattered more than normal."

Brison shook his head at Jeff's last comment, then got back to his job. He spotted a Shadow to his south deploying more infantry squads. He was just about to fire a SPNKr on them, when the Shadow went up in flames. Next thing he knew, a Hornet flew overhead on a strafing run.

Back at Diligence, Wade was pleased with Talon. "Tell them boys at command thanks," he radioed over the intercom. They had received 4 Hornets and a Pelican for support.

Suddenly, a plasma blast flew over the buildings from the south, and hit the Pelican. It completely melted the back end of it. "Mayday, mayday, this is Oscar 005 going down, mayday," the distress signal went out but was not needed. It went down hard, and the crew that had survived the initial shot was definitely KIA.

Wade commented over the radio, "What the hell was that?"

Brison got onto the area's command net and reported what he saw. "It came from the surface a few clicks from the south. It looked like a huge plasma bolt, and it appears to have come from an anti-air weapon."

Talon got in on the conversation, "And that means Diligence is grounded until we take it out. Can we use a Rhino to destroy it?"

"Wait a sec... I got visual on the anti-air gun and, damn, it's big. Due to the lay of the buildings, a Rhino wont be able to hit it. We also can't send a squad. We need to hold the perimeter and we're having a hard enough time as it is," Wade reported.

"Well, regroup and make the perimeter smaller. Use the Hornets to cover each squad as they fall back. Then deploy a squad to take it out."

Wade didn't like the plan, but it was their only hope. He relayed the order for each squad to fall back to form a tight perimeter. He also had Delta report back to the ship. They were going to be the ones to take out the AA gun.

10 minutes later, the teams were positioned and Delta was briefed, along with the two survivors on Echo Team. They were also going to assist Delta so they had a full squad. The plan called for Delta Team to ride on Hornets to the target, then destroy it. They were riding 2 men per Hornet, and were to fly low to avoid the anti air gun. They re-distributed ammo, loaded onto the Hornets and took off.

"Sir, why isn't Alpha, who has a full squad of ODSTs, assigned to this job?" the sniper Jeff asked his superior. Right as he asked that, he sniped a grunt with a plasma launcher.

"Probably because we have done good so far in this fight, and because they need the most men with experience back defending the ship. We have two marines with us who have less experience," replied Brison.

The lead Hornet pilot suddenly radioed in, "AA turret in sight. Coming in, be ready to rope."

The courtyard they came into was mostly rubble, with room made for the cannon. Hornets 1 and 2 were to drop their troops next to the cannon, with Hornet 3 to drop Jeff and one of the marines on top of the building to provide sniper support. A few Grunts and Brutes were stationed around the cannon, with Jackals in some of the remaining buildings.

Brison roped down from the second Hornet and faced two Grunts. Immediately, he put a magnum round in each of their heads. He heard a growl, turned around and managed to dodge a Brute's punch. As he dodged it, he moved back and picked up one of the Grunt's plasma pistols. He began to charge it up and then rolled to avoid another hit. He fired the superheated plasma, tossed the gun, then fired a magnum round to finish off the Brute.

Jeff, meanwhile, was taking out the Jackals. Ducking behind some cover, he popped up, and fired two shots. Both found their marks. Then the marine with him got domed. Jeff got blood on his visor from the shot. "I guess I deserved that," he commented and proceeded to dome another Jackal.

Down at the base of the cannon, all the Covenant were eliminated, and Brison ordered a M168 demolition charge to be planted. After it was planted, he said, "Alright, let's get out of here." The first two Hornets landed in the courtyard and picked up the squad. Suddenly, an anti-air Wraith appeared and fired at the 3rd Hornet hovering above Jeff's position. The shots found their mark and the pilot was killed instantly. The rest of the Hornet exploded and rained shrapnel on the area below it.

Brison immediately radioed, "Jeff! Are you alive?" There was no reply.


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  • 06.26.2011 6:46 AM PDT
Subject: [Novel] Last Initiative (Chapter 3: Checkmate)

lol this suck

  • 06.26.2011 7:10 AM PDT

Rill, must you turn every post into you trolling? Oh well, you got my brother pretty goods and hes pissed to this day. <3

  • 06.26.2011 7:13 AM PDT

On the reach threads I troll without even letting the people know I'm trolling (ex. Bungie, fix the snipers bullet drop. now.).

  • 06.26.2011 8:10 AM PDT

Hold it right there.

Hello. Name's Brian. Look, if you're looking for a flame war with me, just open up the Flood and write up some not-nice things about religion and I'll bring my nukes to the party.

If you want some other way to contact me, you can forget it.

If you're interested in some of my work, you can check my homepage out.

Jeff = Geoff = Cruder Raptor

What are you doing HAYA?

Jeff is alive though.

  • 06.26.2011 11:22 AM PDT

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