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  • Subject: [Novel] Let me know what you think to the start of my story.
Subject: [Novel] Let me know what you think to the start of my story.

Let the big man do his thing.

Im trying to fit it around what actually happened in halo lore and I think its going pretty well so far.
Give it a read let me know what you think. http://www.wattpad.com/1508579-halo-bone-marrow

  • 06.12.2011 6:43 PM PDT

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umm, use the gallery forums

edit: on your story, narrative could use some work, find a style that suits you, it just doesn't seem to fit too well. Opening could use some dramatization(just suggestions)

[Edited on 06.12.2011 7:51 PM PDT]

  • 06.12.2011 7:46 PM PDT