- zak2014
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- Honorable Member
This last chapter seemed to be all dialogue and no motion, just all the characters standing around doing nothing, and a few characters jumped in with no forethought *cough* the Rookie, Dare, Buck *cough*. And speaking of the rookie, first of all, no one else would call him that, just his squad, and secondly, he had no purpose being in the FF at all, it just seemed to be a random cameo.
Hope you listen to my feedback. Good so far, just too short.