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Subject: *MY* idea for Halo 4's story *LONG READ!*


Posted by: dibbs089
Posted by: DethMerchant
its just about as plausible as anything else.
Posted by: DethMerchant
i also know that this will not, and cant be the story of Halo 4. i just felt like sharing
I'm confused as to why you included that last line if you now disagree with it.
Posted by: DethMerchant
i have atteneded college level writing classes, so i believe i could do damn well
Then write out your story and post it in the Gallery. I'm not going to debate the hypothetical with you; I'm going to judge your writing skills based off of what you've presented. Attending a college level writing class doesn't make you a writer any more than attending Sunday school makes you a theologian.


well with the way people are posting their petty little comments without reading the disclaimer, i doubt i will post the full complete story for the largest group of haters in this community. most of the people (and its been quite a few) who have responded to this, be it on the forum themselves, or in private messages have told me the story was great. then there are others like grey who are just putting it down for no good reason. im not saying you are part of that last category though. you have probably been the single most helpful person on this thread.

  • 07.03.2011 1:45 PM PDT

The Forerunner, the Great Journey, and Heaven Theory

[Announcement Trailer] Halo: Forerunner

Posted by: Agustus
I lol'd at the absurd miscommunication that occurs whenever dibbs post something. Perhaps his brain is so highly evolved that he can no longer clearly communicate with lesser life forms, even among his own species.

Posted by: DethMerchant
They're putting it down because this is the Universe Forum (concerned solely with the story aspect of Bungie's games) and you're posting a story that goes against the established canon. Post your story in the Gallery, label it as such (fan-fic I guess), and be done with it. People aren't going to criticize it because it doesn't fit established canon in that forum.

[Edited on 07.03.2011 2:11 PM PDT]

  • 07.03.2011 1:52 PM PDT
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"Time was your ally human. But now it has abandoned you. The Forerunners....have returned. And this tomb... is now yours". - The Didact

I don't like this story.

  • 07.03.2011 1:58 PM PDT

no they dont. corruption is totally different then desire for power. tartarus overthrew his uncle because of the desire of power and ecause he already knew that he was next in line for throne and he just wanted to make the process quicker. he was already corrupt so that had no affect on his desire. the "corrupt brutes in your story" couldnt have been any more corrupt then all the other brutes in haloverse. so him anting the power doesn have any real backround or reason for it. also if u were even smart would understand that if you saw the halo 4 trailer that posting this would have brought up multiple arguments against your story so u wouldnt have to go threw all this -blam!- if u revised any rewrote it before you posted it.

  • 07.03.2011 2:02 PM PDT

That was pretty good. My only concern is the Elite working with the Brute, wouldn't they have constantly fought over leadership of the survivors and killed eachother? And if I were the Elite, I would have killed the Brute the causing all this in the first place, or didn't he know?

Also like the others on this thread I still agree it's a good story, but you saying it's better than what 343 could do is kind of cocky. And the fact that your judging them by how Chief's armor looks in a CGI Teaser Trailer isn't helping.

  • 07.03.2011 2:05 PM PDT

i am not saying it wasnt good it was ok. but it could have been better if u knew what the hell u were doing.

  • 07.03.2011 2:12 PM PDT


Posted by: Naughty T man
i am not saying it wasnt good it was ok. but it could have been better if u knew what the hell u were doing.


lets see if you could do better

  • 07.03.2011 2:16 PM PDT

i will admit it was very cocky of me to say that i could better than 343. i had just woke up, and i was pissed and hungry. i just now went back through and reread some of the stuff it wrote O.o but, it still seems to me like no one reads the disclaimer until after i point it out to them individually. and everyone commenting saying ths can happen and that cant happen: how would you know? what if bungie had actually taken this route if they were making halo 4. i know this is a hypothetical situation though. i just posted this for people to read, and find enjoyable, which alot of people did. i didnt post it for people to lecture me on their interpretation of events leading up to halo 4,. nor did i post this to be compared to halo 4 in any way. i just posted it for the hell of it, yuet some people dont see the purpose and have to begin to be little know-it-alls. but, i do admit i was a tad bit cocky earlier.

  • 07.03.2011 2:25 PM PDT

"Find where the liar hides, so that I may place my boot between his gums!" - Rtas 'Vadum

Posted by: DethMerchant
i didnt post it for people to lecture me on their interpretation of events leading up to halo 4,. nor did i post this to be compared to halo 4 in any way. i just posted it for the hell of it, yuet some people dont see the purpose and have to begin to be little know-it-alls.

Yes you did. In your own disclaimer you asked for feedback. Ironic, that I have to direct you to your own disclaimer.

If you do not want any canonical slip ups do be ripped apart then post it in the gallery, not the Universe Forum.

  • 07.03.2011 2:36 PM PDT


Posted by: anton1792
Posted by: DethMerchant
i didnt post it for people to lecture me on their interpretation of events leading up to halo 4,. nor did i post this to be compared to halo 4 in any way. i just posted it for the hell of it, yuet some people dont see the purpose and have to begin to be little know-it-alls.

Yes you did. In your own disclaimer you asked for feedback. Ironic, that I have to direct you to your own disclaimer.

If you do not want any canonical slip ups do be ripped apart then post it in the gallery, not the Universe Forum.


i tried there and the waypoint forums and got nothing. plus by feedback i really just wanted to know if it was good, i didnt really want people to overthink this too much. and as far as canonical slipups, i just dont see any. nothing is known about halo 4's canon anyways, and that trailer was just a teaser. who is to say thats really how the game will take place? but i get your point. but this was the only place i actually got any response to it. i guess i will try the gallery again, but i dont see that being anymore successful than this was. only a small group of people didnt like this compared to the dozens that private messaged me saying it was good. but whatever, everyones got an opinion.

[Edited on 07.03.2011 2:46 PM PDT]

  • 07.03.2011 2:45 PM PDT


Posted by: DethMerchant

Posted by: anton1792
Posted by: DethMerchant
i didnt post it for people to lecture me on their interpretation of events leading up to halo 4,. nor did i post this to be compared to halo 4 in any way. i just posted it for the hell of it, yuet some people dont see the purpose and have to begin to be little know-it-alls.

Yes you did. In your own disclaimer you asked for feedback. Ironic, that I have to direct you to your own disclaimer.

If you do not want any canonical slip ups do be ripped apart then post it in the gallery, not the Universe Forum.


i tried there and the waypoint forums and got nothing. plus by feedback i really just wanted to know if it was good, i didnt really want people to overthink this too much. and as far as canonical slipups, i just dont see any. nothing is known about halo 4's canon anyways, and that trailer was just a teaser. who is to say thats really how the game will take place? but i get your point. but this was the only place i actually got any response to it. i guess i will try the gallery again, but i dont see that being anymore successful than this was. only a small group of people didnt like this compared to the dozens
that private messaged me saying it was good. but whatever, everyones got an opinion.


You asked for peoples opinions and then got upset when they gave them to you. I thought it was OK but it was a bit cliche.

  • 07.03.2011 4:46 PM PDT

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