- last post: 01.01.0001 12:00 AM PDT
You should learn grammer, sentence structure, and proper punctuation. Plus learn how to "stretch" each sentence you have to create details and well rounded supporting information to the story. Each sentence incorporated in your story could be turned into its own paragraph. Making a detailed story, with proper grammer, punctutaion, and sentence structure, can attract a reader to your story and offer more constructive criticism than, "I'll read this story for a certain amount of money." But getting a reader to find your story enjoyable to read and unable to be left unread takes time and experience to accomplish. In time, with practice, it's possible to do. Also, learn more interesting words to use in your stories. If you use larger or more detailing words, this can be one way to grab a reader's attention. So far, your outline doesn't grab my attention. You need to work on your skills with writing. It also needs.... more. I can't explain it any better than that. That's my criticism. I hope you found it "constructive" enough.
[Edited on 9/2/2004 9:53:57 PM]