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Subject: Very first Machinima. ( Have to start somewhere I guess )

This thread was originally about this trailer. Trailer
It is now updated with the first part, and when the second part is up, I'll update this thread again,rather than making multiple threads.


Planet Of Glass : Part 1

So this is my first machinima, and I know its not perfect, some of the camera angles could be better, some of the scenes could also be better, along with lines, but I've learned a lot from making this first episode and hope you watch the next episode.

Everyone has to start somewhere. Not everyone's first machinima is great, keep that in mind when watching.

Some things that I'm going to improve on in the 2nd episode.
-- music
-- camera angles ( No more fading between scenes )
-- Voice acting lines
-- and action scenes ( There's a lot more action in the 2nd episode )


[Edited on 08.11.2011 8:32 AM PDT]

  • 07.27.2011 4:48 PM PDT
Subject: Machinima Trailer

Cammalamm is the best.

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the video is ok.
but you need better
-wrighter
-beter cam angles
-no more blur at least not the whole video
-and it make almost no sence half the stuff does not go with the video.
-bad music

  • 07.27.2011 5:56 PM PDT
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no u

What capture card did you use and edit software did you use.

  • 07.27.2011 6:41 PM PDT


Posted by: zoobkillerninja
the video is ok.
but you need better
-wrighter
-beter cam angles
-no more blur at least not the whole video
-and it make almost no sence half the stuff does not go with the video.
-bad music

-- to be fair, you don't know what the entire story is from one trailer, and you spelled writer wrong.
-- fair enough, it's my first Machinima.
-- I don't know what you mean,blur.
-- I didn't have all the lines so I threw some in there, I spent far more time on the actual thing than the trailer
-- Music, is the trailer music from Battle LA ( which is crap ) but the music is good, if you don't like it, that's you opinion, a load of people do.
Thanks anyway, I'll work on my camera angles, and I don't think we need a new writer. Cause I'm the writer and you haven't even seen the whole thing, anyway thanks.

  • 07.28.2011 4:15 AM PDT


Posted by: rolf
What capture card did you use and edit software did you use.

HD PVR and Sony Vegas Movie Studio.

  • 07.28.2011 4:48 AM PDT


Posted by: HRBroadcaster

Posted by: zoobkillerninja
the video is ok.
but you need better
-wrighter
-beter cam angles
-no more blur at least not the whole video
-and it make almost no sence half the stuff does not go with the video.
-bad music

-- to be fair, you don't know what the entire story is from one trailer, and you spelled writer wrong.
-- fair enough, it's my first Machinima.
-- I don't know what you mean,blur.
-- I didn't have all the lines so I threw some in there, I spent far more time on the actual thing than the trailer
-- Music, is the trailer music from Battle LA ( which is crap ) but the music is good, if you don't like it, that's you opinion, a load of people do.
Thanks anyway, I'll work on my camera angles, and I don't think we need a new writer. Cause I'm the writer and you haven't even seen the whole thing, anyway thanks.


To be Fair Battle: LA was much better then any other Alien movie that hit the theaters in late 2010 and early 1011...being only outplayed right now by "Falling Skies" and by "District 9"

  • 07.28.2011 7:23 AM PDT


Posted by: Ghost Bn

Posted by: HRBroadcaster

Posted by: zoobkillerninja
the video is ok.
but you need better
-wrighter
-beter cam angles
-no more blur at least not the whole video
-and it make almost no sence half the stuff does not go with the video.
-bad music

-- to be fair, you don't know what the entire story is from one trailer, and you spelled writer wrong.
-- fair enough, it's my first Machinima.
-- I don't know what you mean,blur.
-- I didn't have all the lines so I threw some in there, I spent far more time on the actual thing than the trailer
-- Music, is the trailer music from Battle LA ( which is crap ) but the music is good, if you don't like it, that's you opinion, a load of people do.
Thanks anyway, I'll work on my camera angles, and I don't think we need a new writer. Cause I'm the writer and you haven't even seen the whole thing, anyway thanks.


To be Fair Battle: LA was much better then any other Alien movie that hit the theaters in late 2010 and early 1011...being only outplayed right now by "Falling Skies" and by "District 9"

To be honest, I heard from a reliable friend that it made no sense what the military had done, I've never seen it ! I just watched the trailer and liked the music, and funny enough, I've never seen district 9 either. I bought it and I'm looking at the case of it as I type this ! :)
I was never bothered to watch it though.

  • 07.28.2011 7:30 AM PDT


Posted by: HRBroadcaster



To be Fair Battle: LA was much better then any other Alien movie that hit the theaters in late 2010 and early 1011...being only outplayed right now by "Falling Skies" and by "District 9" [/quote]
To be honest, I heard from a reliable friend that it made no sense what the military had done, I've never seen it ! I just watched the trailer and liked the music, and funny enough, I've never seen district 9 either. I bought it and I'm looking at the case of it as I type this ! :)
I was never bothered to watch it though.


Actually opposite of your friend, the Military movements and actual premise behind the Aliens made logical sense . For once Aliens were not Super powered, they actually were similar to the humans, used logical and effective and realistic tactics. The combat was great. both sides took looses, both sides performed a nice theatrical combat. great movie..should watch it..for free...online..all it takes is a google search. District 9 was a different type on Alien movie but non-te-less also makes more sense then "Independence Day", "Alien", "Predator" or " War of the Worlds"

I can go on and explain the tactics Military used in Battle LA but that will take a long post. All i can say.. probably your friend is either a certain type of a soldier that can see flaws..or he does not really understand how military works..in urban settings...with civilians..

  • 07.28.2011 7:38 AM PDT


Posted by: Ghost Bn

Posted by: HRBroadcaster



To be Fair Battle: LA was much better then any other Alien movie that hit the theaters in late 2010 and early 1011...being only outplayed right now by "Falling Skies" and by "District 9" [/quote]
To be honest, I heard from a reliable friend that it made no sense what the military had done, I've never seen it ! I just watched the trailer and liked the music, and funny enough, I've never seen district 9 either. I bought it and I'm looking at the case of it as I type this ! :)
I was never bothered to watch it though.


Actually opposite of your friend, the Military movements and actual premise behind the Aliens made logical sense . For once Aliens were not Super powered, they actually were similar to the humans, used logical and effective and realistic tactics. The combat was great. both sides took looses, both sides performed a nice theatrical combat. great movie..should watch it..for free...online..all it takes is a google search. District 9 was a different type on Alien movie but non-te-less also makes more sense then "Independence Day", "Alien", "Predator" or " War of the Worlds"

I can go on and explain the tactics Military used in Battle LA but that will take a long post. All i can say.. probably your friend is either a certain type of a soldier that can see flaws..or he does not really understand how military works..in urban settings...with civilians..

He use to be a soldier, anyway, I think I'll watch District 9,It'll be about time.

  • 07.28.2011 7:46 AM PDT


Posted by: Jacob1231
The forums are a horrible place to turn for this kind of stuff, because they're full of -blam!-s who think they're better than you at everything.

I think you did a nice job on this.

Thanks man, I tried pretty hard on the first part, which will be out in a few days.

  • 07.28.2011 8:01 AM PDT

Yeah I'll have a look. I'll update this thread with future stuff. I'll take a look at your trailer, post it here and I'll check it out later.

  • 07.28.2011 8:32 AM PDT

Yes, because unlike you, he took his time with it, worked on parts and made very little cinematic mistakes that somewhat conveyed the story that we will be seeing, and captivated our attention. Not to mention HE can take critique unlike you.. he will succeed you will not...not with your attitude.

people try to help this sod out all he can do is make excuses and insult others like a child.

The more halo gets older the More 12 year olds get into machinima expecting to pampered and constantly receive "good job".. and when countered with tough positive critique resort to insults

Listen its simple.. if you want to have a better movie, you have to improve, and the only to improve if some 1 will point out the flaws..blindly defending it will not work out.. was like you.. realized thats not the way to go..even though i did not make those mistakes at the time...

[Edited on 07.28.2011 10:14 AM PDT]

  • 07.28.2011 9:08 AM PDT


Posted by: Jacob1231
We made 2, yours is way better though.

1

2

The first one isn't there, you should get a HD PVR like me for HD quality.

  • 07.29.2011 3:48 AM PDT

Cammalamm is the best.

External Links-
>My Photobucket page
>My Twitter account


Posted by: HRBroadcaster

Posted by: zoobkillerninja
the video is ok.
but you need better
-wrighter
-beter cam angles
-no more blur at least not the whole video
-and it make almost no sence half the stuff does not go with the video.
-bad music

-- to be fair, you don't know what the entire story is from one trailer, and you spelled writer wrong.
-- fair enough, it's my first Machinima.
-- I don't know what you mean,blur.
-- I didn't have all the lines so I threw some in there, I spent far more time on the actual thing than the trailer
-- Music, is the trailer music from Battle LA ( which is crap ) but the music is good, if you don't like it, that's you opinion, a load of people do.
Thanks anyway, I'll work on my camera angles, and I don't think we need a new writer. Cause I'm the writer and you haven't even seen the whole thing, anyway thanks.


srry if you did not like my opinion.
i was just saying things that i thot would make it better.
and yes i know i have never seen any of your other videos but that is not what i was only criticising it was your trailer.

send me a PM with the link to your new stuff and i would love to comment on them
not being sarcatic..

  • 07.30.2011 4:44 PM PDT

Part 1 is out
Thanks.

  • 08.11.2011 8:30 AM PDT