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Subject: novel Halo:Covenent Begining P.2
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im all for assisinating,but i dont like my fingers dirty.
headlice?i dont understand english.
IM A MONITOR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Now I have to haul my heavy ass back to my station,he thought.Or maybe I could stay with Pastrel,no,he wouldn't do that,well maybe{.He knocked before he could stop himself."yes,teacher?"Said pastrel,whilst he opened his door."well,I was thinking,Pastrel would you consider letting me stay here for the night?"The Elite awnsered happily"well of course,master,it's the least I could do!"

The Zealot seemed overwhelmed with this much hospitality."W-w-well,thank you Pastrel,Ididnt know you had so much manners.Oh!I have a wonderful idea;why don't you come with me on my next mission!"the young Elite must have took this all heavily,his eyes were popping out of his head."Well,of course,I would like that.So what's the mission?"Asked Pastrel,"we must kill a spartan devis-",but his voice was silinced,from an explosion.It came from the arms depot!"Yelled a running Elite.

"You were saying teacher?"asked the calm but quite excited Pastrel."Oh!Y-ya we need to kill a spartan devision,but that doesn't mean anything right now.Cause we are about to kick some human ass!"

sorry its not as long as the last part,but I dont have alot of time to upload my story.

next part Pastrel meets the rest of his crew,and finds out what a real battle is like. please keep updated,you ight never know when ill upload my next part.

[Edited on 10.04.2011 4:27 PM PDT]

  • 10.04.2011 4:24 PM PDT

Quit -blam!- stalking me you weirdo.

Not to be mean, but that writing was horrid at the begining.

  • 10.04.2011 4:30 PM PDT
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im all for assisinating,but i dont like my fingers dirty.
headlice?i dont understand english.
IM A MONITOR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

the beginning was where i left off at my first part if you haven't read it then please do.and thanks for the opinion i opened minded for any opinion out there.thanks for the comment.

  • 10.04.2011 4:33 PM PDT

Quit -blam!- stalking me you weirdo.


Posted by: zealotprince56
the beginning was where i left off at my first part if you haven't read it then please do.and thanks for the opinion i opened minded for any opinion out there.thanks for the comment.

/just remember after comas and periods, put a space.

  • 10.04.2011 4:42 PM PDT

United Armed Forces

1: Look up Sangheili names, and mimic that. The names you've created would not fit in society.

2: Name each of the species by what the Sangheili call them. San 'shyuum, Jiralhanae, Unggoy, et cetera.

3: Sentence structure.

4: Cheetas exist on Earth.

5: There are less than one hundred spartans. A minor Elite is the match of a Spartan in all but experience and skill. A zealot is EASILY the match of any of the spartans.

6: Sangheili hate the Jiralhanae. Hunters are Lekgolo - not really the things you're thinking of.

7: A trainee would not be an Ultra.

8: The Sangheili are far from peaceful. They are essentially the military might of the Covenant - being a warrior is something Sangheili train for their entire lives.

9: If they're wearing their armor, why are their feet cold?

10: What is a covenant "Ark"? There would be no need for anything remotely like an Ark for the covenant in 2525.

I'm sorry to burst your bubble, but to really write something like this, you need to learn a LOT more about the Halo universe. I don't mean to sound condescending.

[Edited on 10.04.2011 6:16 PM PDT]

  • 10.04.2011 6:16 PM PDT