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Subject: Please lock this thread

Hey, I have created a new thread for my story; one that actually displays the story, not just a link to it. Please lock this thread.

[Edited on 10.29.2011 11:03 PM PDT]

  • 10.28.2011 10:01 PM PDT
Subject: Haunted, A fan fiction

Your writing style su- No not really. A lot of People just call me Mendoza... it's a complicated story. 'My story' I mean.

[Edited on 10.28.2011 10:13 PM PDT]

  • 10.28.2011 10:12 PM PDT

Ha, nice. I actually "borrowed" my buddy's last name for that character... Which is funny, seeing as his personality is nothing like the character's whatsoever.
...And, the story is fairly complicated as well... I just hope that it isn't too complicated. Too complicated often results in a boring story, in my experience :)

  • 10.28.2011 10:26 PM PDT


Posted by: A Fat Bell End
Ha, nice. I actually "borrowed" my buddy's last name for that character... Which is funny, seeing as his personality is nothing like the character's whatsoever.
...And, the story is fairly complicated as well... I just hope that it isn't too complicated. Too complicated often results in a boring story, in my experience :)
Hmmm... a Story that is too complicated is often boring -takes notes-

Right... so anyways. There are a few errors, none that are like 'noteable' by the average reader unless we're talking Wolverfrog or AssaultCommand here.

So in my opinion, the story is good and etcetera.

[Edited on 10.28.2011 10:29 PM PDT]

  • 10.28.2011 10:29 PM PDT

Thanks! Though the story is written, this is only the first draft. I hope to re-read and polish the language soon.

  • 10.28.2011 10:36 PM PDT

Not a problem, looking forward to reading the polished version.

Now... -resumes thinking about what I can write for a Halo story-

[Edited on 10.28.2011 10:40 PM PDT]

  • 10.28.2011 10:40 PM PDT

The tide is turning, brothers! Let us take our kingdom back!

Not bad at all.

  • 10.28.2011 10:41 PM PDT


Posted by: OfTheBloodguard
Not bad at all.


Thank you very much.

  • 10.28.2011 10:56 PM PDT

No u

You should post it here. Just post it one chapter at a time like once a week.

  • 10.29.2011 9:00 AM PDT


Posted by: Doctor Jensen
You should post it here. Just post it one chapter at a time like once a week.


I am planning to... eventually. It was late when I had first created this thread; too late to begin pasting an entire story over here.
Also, the story is in it's first draft phase. I hope to polish it, adding more eloquence to the utilitarian style of the story in it's current state... Without disbanding the hard-sci fi feel that I hope the story has.
I will begin posting it soon. Stay tuned.

[Edited on 10.29.2011 1:35 PM PDT]

  • 10.29.2011 1:34 PM PDT
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is there anyway to save threads on halo waypoint.com?

nice story =)

  • 10.30.2011 3:38 PM PDT

Thanks, and I am not sure about the saving threads question. I am really a bit of a luddite when it comes to forums :)

  • 10.30.2011 4:49 PM PDT