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Posted by: Noob Eater1053
Hmm, coming from a fellow machinima producer it's not bad for your first attempt. The narration is one of the big issue that need to be cleaned up. The cinematography was good, along with the soundtrack. Very moving. I like how your first try also is not a Halo cannon rip off, like I usually see.
Very nice Op, perhaps we should talk sometime about machinima and stuff. Keep it up!
Thanks! People have said that narration is the biggest issue. Volume I can fix with some tinkering on Audacity, but the reason why I chose that particular voice style is because I interpreted the piece as having a narrator who's lost so much that he simply is numb to it all, therefore having a, more or less, monotone voice. I suppose it was a bad idea in retrospect, though.
Posted by: blade246
I wish that the shots were all still shots without any characters seen. The dialouge is fantastic but the voice acting itself was poor. But nice job for your first try, though!
Maybe still shots without any characters would've been better for this kind of story. See my above comment for the voice acting aspect, and thanks for watching!
Posted by: commander tempu
Shout out to Ramen my old Writers Corner Bro!.* Bro fists Ramen.* Looks good i will check it out. Nothing is perfect the first try. Trust me i know this from experince. Everything is a learning process. After Watching it i found it good other than some minor video issues. A few audio problems that made it hard to hear at the begining and end but over all it was good.
P.S. Shout out to Writers Corner. Have a good X-mas.
Thanks, tempu! I wish you a good Christmas as well. :)