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Subject: A Summary Writing Test

"We are the next generation of soldiers, an A.I built for war. We battle the darkness for humanity. We are the Caedus A.I"

I am giving my writing skills a test on this one. I've already wirting down much of the source material but I wish to see how people react to this paragraph. Please leave any comments or criticism below. Both positive and negative feedback will be appriciated.

2750: The Alliance of Unified Governments has been reformed. Power has been relinquished over time to the colonies of the human empire and now it stands as a complete and fully recognized republic. Spanning two hundred systems with two thousand worlds in its fold the resources flow, supplying multiple colonies and strengthening humanity as a whole. The once war torn world previously known as New Schism is broken. Its once lush forests were burn long ago. The poles cover ruined and damaged warships and tanks who's frozen hulls crack and freeze in the cold. Skeletons of men and women who served with honour still lie where they died. Their armour long since frozen, encasing them in cold tombs. Among the humans lie the enemy they fought. A long and troubled history is shared between the two opponents, which was once important but is now behind and forgiven by the species that fought. The dream of the twenty-first century has been achieved. The aliens species that fought in the Great Contact War have shrugged off the bonds of loss and rediscovered the the technology that was lost to them. Humanity finds itself in galaxy filled with strange and wonderful creatures. Where aliens walk the streets of Earth and her colonies, fully integrated and prospering citizens. No longer is there suspicions of retribution over what was done three hundred years ago. But as Humanity finds it footing in a large and unexplored galaxy danger looms over the horizon. For the drums of war have never ceased and the origin of the many species that were named Alpha, Beta, Chitin and Raider is soon to come. For their ancestors forgot what they left behind when they entered the dark of space and what they had never wished to see again is soon to come. In all its glory and in all its might that which has never known defeat continues a war that engulfed half a galaxy.

  • 01.14.2012 10:05 PM PDT