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Subject: English Homework
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Wow, i needed to right a 16 line poem for English due in two days and i need your help in perfecting it y'all. And you can change words and what not....

Wide awake and physical

Our time has come and gone
Soon a new age will be here
Over the horazion comes dawn
And he never has any fear

He picks up his wepon
something so new
He yells "i'll get you with my anti-son-of-a-Bit(h Stick
As it glowes blue

He's wide awake
and physical, he's very dangerous
He never makes a mistake
His name is master cheif

and he's wide awake and physical....

  • 09.21.2004 4:53 PM PDT
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Nice. Just one thing, the word -blam!- isn't censored. There is no need to type Bit(h

  • 09.21.2004 4:55 PM PDT
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Doesnt flow right, its a good poem and all, but it just doesnt flow, you need something that rhymes a bit more, or flows better.
Id make one up but im tired =p

  • 09.21.2004 4:53 PM PDT
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Posted by: Lil_miz_liz


Our time has come and gone
Soon a new age will be here
Over the horazion comes dawn
And he never has any fear


How about "horizon" instead of "horazion".

  • 09.21.2004 4:53 PM PDT