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Subject: Mysophobia, a short story [DISTURBING CONTENT]

Jono

WARNING: Some of the content in this story may disturb certain readers.

Mysophobia

This is an original piece, let me know what you guys think!

[Edited on 03.27.2012 5:54 PM PDT]

  • 03.26.2012 4:10 PM PDT

Very good, there were a few grammar errors but the usage of such basic ideas worked surprisingly well with this short story.

  • 03.28.2012 5:45 PM PDT

Jono


Posted by: PGLaDDy
Very good, there were a few grammar errors but the usage of such basic ideas worked surprisingly well with this short story.


Thank you, it's always nice to get feedback. About the grammar errors, Open Office has one of the worst grammar checks, and I'm a terrible proof reader.

  • 03.28.2012 6:41 PM PDT

Very grim and sets the tone of the story. I love the dystopic feel. I always aim for those styles and they're definitely the ones I prefer reading and writing.

Some certain areas could be described better, but otherwise I think it's a great short story. Good work!

  • 04.02.2012 4:35 AM PDT