- last post: 01.01.0001 12:00 AM PDT
Well, for one you put too many of the other clips in and shortened it alot. Some of the transitions just didnt work, like when he put down his AR, the soun was off as well as the voice. The ending was ok, with the transitions, but get rid of the voice overs, he isnt on a ship, so it doesnt work. you could have had him cut off at "your doing" and it would have sounded better, but it still wouldnt have been that great. Good job overall, but you cut out too much of the openening sequence and it cut to the last part a little too soon.