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Subject: My first Story 1st draft

Challenge me to a Hawaiian Punch chugging contest. I dare you.


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$.50 in store credit.


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Posted by: Zombine
Nice! Thanks for the link, I didn't know a group like this existed.
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Posted by: Zombine
It was a little interesting, but fairly repetitive. Same complaints as described above. Would anyone mind if I posted a short story I wrote? We could turn this into a Floodian writing thread.


that would be amazing!
I think you two would like this.


How many active users are there in that group?
I'm not in there often, but they keep pretty active. There's a steady flow of content in there.

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Posted by: Zombine


that was really cool, good characterization with Adrian, the fatman, and his brother.

I liked the paragraph you devoted to establishing the setting.

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Inappropriate. Went a little to far with the butt hole tearing.

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Not bad, but the ending was underwhelming. The idea of selling body parts is interesting, but it would have been more interesting if the body was that of a donor. Or, if he salvaged parts off his own brother to pay for his meal.

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Yeah, I had a lot of trouble ending it. I do have a much better ending in mind but I've never sat down and done it. This was actually written in a single run, no editing. The goal was to create an emotional story in two pages since the VN project was inspired by Katawa Shoujo and the director wanted feels up the ass. So like 30 minutes, no editing and I haven't touched it since.
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@Zombine

Not bad, but the ending was underwhelming. The idea of selling body parts is interesting, but it would have been more interesting if the body was that of a donor. Or, if he salvaged parts off his own brother to pay for his meal.

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Posted by: Zombine
the director wanted feels up the ass.


heh I could have obliged. ;)

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