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Posted by: Heven644
I'll be honest (Just read it), I love the concept of the Magic 8 Ball and all that, and the writing was solid from my point of view, but the showing the creature and describing it's appearance sort of ruined the suspense, I would have preferred it to be an enigmatic force, or maybe something that can predict the future and thus drives him to his doom in an effort to avert fate, or something (Sort of Oedipus style).
But, good showing, I like it so far!
Hey thanks for the critique. Now that I've read it again I do agree with you about making the creature ominous