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Subject: I'm no longer afraid of the night

Ever since I was young I've always had a thing with night time, that is once the sun has gone down. Not really a bad thing except when I was younger and more recently. I always felt like the night was coming after me, I would have bad dreams when I was sleeping, usually involving me getting thrown into a void, or when I wasn't sleeping I would look out a window and see a figure with beady red eyes staring at me. Usually I would run to my parents after having an experience like this and they would comfort me or tell me I was just imagining things when I would try to show them the figure in the window they either wouldn't see it or it wouldn't be there anymore afterwards they would always make sure I was wearing a necklace, that they got for me when I was a baby and tell me that the necklace would comfort me.

As I got older I stopped having nightmares though I did still see the figures staring at me through the windows, I eventually started to feel comforted by them, just attributing them to my extraordinary imagination and even they eventually left me.

Though when I graduated from high school and moved out of my parents house, everything came rushing back at me in harsher force then what it had been when I was younger, the figures would now tap, or even bang, on the windows and my nightmares would now have me surrounded by these figures, after either of these happenings I would hold my necklace tight and close my eyes. Comforted that no matter what I would be safe.

One night, I lost the necklace. I didn't realize it until I woke up after an exceptionally terrible dream, where I was dragged by the figures to, god knows where. I woke up grabbed for my necklace, but found nothing. I looked up and saw three pairs of those terrible eyes just stairing at me, I froze. I had no idea what I should do, eventually they decided to make a move, they surrounded my bed and took off all of the sheets I had covering me. Then they grabbed me and took me outside of my apartment, I couldn't move, I don't know why, but I couldn't.

Eventually I fell asleep in their grasp, I awoke to find myself surrounded by even more of them, there must have been seven or eight, I got up and tried to run but they grabbed my and started dragging me, to where I don't know, but I had a feeling that I was going to find out what my dreams were foreshadowing. Not even a few seconds later I felt myself thrown and then surrounded by complete darkness, there was nothing, no feelings, no sounds, no sights, no nothing.
After what felt like an eternity I hit a floor. My bedroom floor I looked out the bedroom window and it was open I climbed out and went to my hosts home, where I would haunt her until it was time for her to become one of us too.

  • 12.16.2012 9:50 PM PDT

K

Too long did not listen

  • 12.16.2012 9:51 PM PDT

Copypasta didn't read. lol

  • 12.16.2012 9:51 PM PDT
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*wonders how New Clan Recruitment For Shadow Pack thread gets 55 replies*

*reads "Hi I'm Ashley. . ." *

[Question Answered]

*proceeds to read on, shakes head, and gently laughs*

Actually, the ban on weapons would only cause an influx of violence in the States.

  • 12.16.2012 9:52 PM PDT


Posted by: Ex0 Dante
Copypasta didn't read. lol

Not copypasta, thanks for the bump though.

  • 12.16.2012 9:52 PM PDT
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I enjoy magma.

Not terrible OP. Needs some refining/better writing. But not bad.

  • 12.16.2012 9:53 PM PDT
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Deep stuff.

  • 12.16.2012 9:53 PM PDT


Posted by: qweqwe97

Posted by: Ex0 Dante
Copypasta didn't read. lol

Not copypasta, thanks for the bump though.


Hey,

I bumped it,

Me want thanx too :'(

  • 12.16.2012 9:54 PM PDT

Major props to my hommie Sheeef. He made Recon possible for me. Long time recovering emails and passwords. And it was his. lol.

OP, did Slenderman come to visit you??? ;)

  • 12.16.2012 9:54 PM PDT


Posted by: Tevis
Not terrible OP. Needs some refining/better writing. But not bad.

Thanks, this is my first time writing anything aside from essays.

  • 12.16.2012 9:55 PM PDT

It was kind of meh, I think the ending could use some working, I guess you could make the creatures make noises, use something like *tok tok tok* to illustrate those noises, make them more real and then end the story with something like "I looked through the window, down at the child sleeping in the bed. *tok tok tok*" yu get the idea, right?

[Edited on 12.16.2012 9:56 PM PST]

  • 12.16.2012 9:55 PM PDT
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Posted by: qweqwe97

Posted by: Tevis
Not terrible OP. Needs some refining/better writing. But not bad.

Thanks, this is my first time writing anything aside from essays.
Good on ya. Keep editing. Clean it up a bit. Could be some quality creepypasta some day.

  • 12.16.2012 9:56 PM PDT
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I'm Batman.

There is a difference between you and I, OP....
...we both looked into the abyss, but when it looked back at us... you blinked.

  • 12.16.2012 9:57 PM PDT


Posted by: linos100
It was kind of meh, I think the ending could use some working, I guess you could make the creatures make noises, use something like *tok tok tok* to illustrate those noises, make them more real and then end the story with something like "I looked through the window, down at the child sleeping in the bed. *tok tok tok*" yu get the idea, right?

Yeah, that sounds good.
Posted by: Tevis
Good on ya. Keep editing. Clean it up a bit. Could be some quality creepypasta some day.

Thanks! really, I just wrote this because I was bored and need to do Calc homework. :P

  • 12.16.2012 9:59 PM PDT
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Posted by: qweqwe97

Posted by: linos100
It was kind of meh, I think the ending could use some working, I guess you could make the creatures make noises, use something like *tok tok tok* to illustrate those noises, make them more real and then end the story with something like "I looked through the window, down at the child sleeping in the bed. *tok tok tok*" yu get the idea, right?

Yeah, that sounds good.
Posted by: Tevis
Good on ya. Keep editing. Clean it up a bit. Could be some quality creepypasta some day.

Thanks! really, I just wrote this because I was bored and need to do Calc homework. :P
Don't use the tok noise, but that's not a terrible idea in and of itself. But yeah the more you can do to make it feel like it's actually occurred/occurring to the person reading, the more spooks provided.

And we all love some good spooks. No problem, man. But get that homework done.

  • 12.16.2012 10:04 PM PDT

"Life is constantly fleeting from your grasp even from the very day it's bestowed upon you, but the shadow of death is always there, waiting for its chance to take you away."

"Even though many may not think so, ignorance and innocence are one and the same. The only difference is that one sounds nicer."

"I once knew a man who spent his entire life contemplating where we go after our death....it's a shame he realized it a second too late to tell anyone."

"The only ones who fear the night are the prey of those who hunt by darkness."

  • 12.16.2012 10:08 PM PDT


Posted by: Sgt Commando
Actually, the ban on weapons would only cause an influx of violence in the States.


Lol

  • 12.16.2012 10:33 PM PDT