- Bungie Sam
- Fabled Legendary Member
CAMERA ANGLES and SCENE TIME
The second camera angle pan was too long; 23 seconds.
Did you not think that the viewer would get bored after the first 7 seconds?
Get different camera angles in there.
You expect the viewer to know the two Spartans at the beginning simply from a rear view from afar and a top-down view (also from far away)?
Get up and close with the two Spartans so the viewer can get an idea of who they're dealing with.
Also, for scene introduction you should give multiple camera angles of the environment. You gave the viewer one shot of a quiet scene with a stream of water.
I think if you had more than one shot for each plot flow things would work out nicely.
The deeper toned and more distinct British voice actor doesn't sound enthusiastic at all.