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Subject: Unnamed Machinima Test Scene (please review)

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http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vW5Z5gfhK0s&feature=youtu. be

This machinima may or may not start production (it all depends on how well it is recieved by the viewers). So, yeah, please watch it, it's 50 seconds long, and either "like" the video on YouTube (or "dislike") and please leave comments about what you liked and what you didn't like either here or on the video itself.

  • 12.18.2012 10:28 AM PST

When recording it's important to remember the rule of thirds (don't forget that this applies both vertically and horizontally). The voice acting was a bit shabby, but that's to be expected for an early attempt. I say that you should look up some film techniques and figure out some interesting ways to set up shots, overall pretty good for a first.

  • 12.18.2012 9:41 PM PST

Per Audacia Ad Astra

CAMERA ANGLES and SCENE TIME
The second camera angle pan was too long; 23 seconds.
Did you not think that the viewer would get bored after the first 7 seconds?

Get different camera angles in there.
You expect the viewer to know the two Spartans at the beginning simply from a rear view from afar and a top-down view (also from far away)?

Get up and close with the two Spartans so the viewer can get an idea of who they're dealing with.

Also, for scene introduction you should give multiple camera angles of the environment. You gave the viewer one shot of a quiet scene with a stream of water.

I think if you had more than one shot for each plot flow things would work out nicely.

VOICE ACTING
The deeper toned and more distinct British voice actor doesn't sound enthusiastic at all.

  • 12.19.2012 12:37 PM PST
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  • 12.23.2012 7:19 PM PST