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Subject: I have started to get into writing
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What do you think this is my first thing I ever wrote

Don't abandon me yet!
I can't speak, think or feel
I am cursed with hourly torture
Solitude!
With thee I dwell
Our assiduous gated hell
My soul has died
Now my heart cries
Then white turned to black and life turned to ash
I can hear you say my name
I can almost see your smile
I can almost feel the warmth of your embrace
There is nothing but silence now
As I drift from this world

  • 12.29.2012 2:09 PM PDT
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13.72 billion years in the making.

On December 1st, 2012, I met Neil deGrasse Tyson. I shook the man's hand, and even made him laugh. Not much else to do with my life now.

Shadow?

  • 12.29.2012 2:10 PM PDT
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''Misanthropes have some admirable if paradoxical virtues. It is no exaggeration to say that we are among the nicest people you are likely to meet. Because good manners build sturdy walls, our distaste for intimacy makes us exceedingly cordial "ships that pass in the night." As long as you remain a stranger we will be your friend forever.''

''I want people to be sincere; a man of honor shouldn't speak a single word that doesn't come straight from his heart. ''

Eeeeeeeeeemmmmoooooooo.

  • 12.29.2012 2:10 PM PDT

''Hell is other people.''

NO. NO GOD NO.

  • 12.29.2012 2:12 PM PDT

I'm your biggest fan!

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Shadow?

  • 12.29.2012 2:13 PM PDT

I'll be impressed when you write a new script for the Star Wars prequels and get Dicksny to remake them.

  • 12.29.2012 2:14 PM PDT

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Posted by: WinyPit82
Shadow?
...You still haven't figured out that this is Shadows yet?

I am disappoint.

  • 12.29.2012 2:15 PM PDT
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Posted by: OdorousLicense3

Posted by: WinyPit82
Shadow?
...You still haven't figured out that this is Shadows yet?

I am disappoint.
I'm not shadows -_- how many times do I have to tell you

  • 12.29.2012 2:15 PM PDT
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I'm not a fan of poetry.

  • 12.29.2012 2:15 PM PDT

Unsuccessfully trying to bring science and reason to The Flood...

I despise poetry as an art form, so I probably can't judge this properly.

My first criticism would be that you don't use much imagination here. Its just one long list of cliches. But not bad for the first thing you ever wrote!!

Keep at it!

  • 12.29.2012 2:15 PM PDT

Posted by: La Petite Morte

I remember you

Did you JUMP yet?

[Edited on 12.29.2012 2:21 PM PST]

  • 12.29.2012 2:17 PM PDT

Who's Shadows? Is her poetry as good as this persons?

  • 12.29.2012 2:19 PM PDT
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Posted by: xAT 117x
I despise poetry as an art form, so I probably can't judge this properly.

My first criticism would be that you don't use much imagination here. Its just one long list of cliches. But not bad for the first thing you ever wrote!!

Keep at it!
Thank you

  • 12.29.2012 2:28 PM PDT