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I wrote this and thought you would enjoy it.

Part 1

You are in a Forerunner base that has been abandoned recently. Now, the covenant have taken control of it. You and your team of spartans must infiltrate the base and steal the forerunner technology in the command center. Then, report back from the com center. After this, you must place the nuke you were given and time it long enough you and your team to escape.
"Ok spartans, move out." You and your team split up. Blue team is going to the command center, green team will snipe out anything they see as a threat as they hide in the catwalks, red team (your team) will go to the com center. "Six ODSTs were sent down here, but never came out, watch your back." the group leader said as he lead you and your group down a dark hall that you could swear was haunted. "AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH! Help! We're under attak by these... these monsters!" you hear on the COM. "FLOOD!?" You yell back. "No, they aren't flood. They are amphibious like creatures, they....(You hear gun fire then silence, sudenly you hear the com again.) there, they're gone." he says back. Your team leader enters the com chanal. "Tell me, which team is this? Explain what happened." there is a silence then a reply. "This is blue team, we were walking down a hall then sudenly it stoped, the rest of the base was gone and all that is here is a swamp. Then these, these creatures came out and attaked my group. Come here. Don't worry about the COM room.... it's not there." You and your team go to Blue teams position. Green team follows you after listening to the conversation.

(to be continued)

[Edited on 11/16/2004 4:39:43 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 1:08 PM PDT
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Pretty cool, just... if we're MC, chances are that we're the team leader, in fact the squad leader too. just a little something-something.

  • 05.19.2004 1:13 PM PDT
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The last man on Earth sat in a room, there came a knock at the door.

Service Record

Sorry, but it's hard for me to read in 2nd person pov.

  • 05.19.2004 1:19 PM PDT
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Yes, I know, but I kind of like to hear the story of someone who was with the main character. such as my other 2 stories.

  • 05.19.2004 2:38 PM PDT
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You should make a story about a group of odst who hate mc and are pinned down by covies then mc comes in and saves em then they like him

  • 05.19.2004 2:41 PM PDT
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No how bout they try and kill him, and mc drops his gun and beats them up, more manly and less kid like, lol I'm jokin, I only do mission log stories, sry. Ask Eric Nylund, or William C. Dietz, if they would bother with short stories. Hey, who wants part 2? Whoa, did everyone die in the forum, or are they reading my story?

[Edited on 5/19/2004 3:02:12 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 2:53 PM PDT
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I want part 2!!!!!

  • 05.19.2004 3:02 PM PDT
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Ok part 2. let me read my story to see where I left off.
ok
Part 2.

While going towards blue teams position that haunting feeling gets worse. You say, "Hey guys, do any of you get the feeling that your not alone?" "Yeah, maybe it's because there are 20 other spartans in the room with me, but maybe not." The leader says sarcasticly. Yous sigh, ignoring the haunting feeling and the chill in your spine you keep walking.

meanwhile...

"Sargent, status." The blue team leader says. "Three men are missing and one man's leg is broken." The sarge replies. The leader swears. "Man, where are they! How long has it been.?" The leader asks. "We were attaked at 0439 hours, we contacted red team at 0520 hours... and now it's 0700 hours." a soldier replies."They should be here in 15 minutes, acording to how long it took us to get here." He said again. "There! They are early!" The red and green team walk out of a hallway, amazed they stare at the millions of trees covering up the busted building, From the inside it looked like a dome. The red and green team leaders cam up to the blue team leader. "What happened here?" They say.

[Edited on 5/19/2004 3:27:19 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 3:03 PM PDT
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It's done, part 2. Any comments? post any thing that would make me want to write a part 3!
Which will be good, I asure you.

  • 05.19.2004 3:38 PM PDT
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take a writing class. seriously.

  • 05.19.2004 3:43 PM PDT
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Nevermind. part three comes soon.

[Edited on 5/19/2004 4:01:05 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 3:48 PM PDT
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yes

  • 05.19.2004 3:49 PM PDT
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Sry for over reacting, lol. It was a joke right?

[Edited on 5/19/2004 4:01:39 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 3:54 PM PDT
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i was J/K. haw haw! i do this often. i like getting a response. check my record. well this was fun... whens part 3?

  • 05.19.2004 3:57 PM PDT
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. Oh, nevermind lol!

[Edited on 5/19/2004 4:00:30 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 3:57 PM PDT
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Liton, no offense, but just because one person doesn't like your story doesn't mean you should give up and leave. That is like Bungie not finishing Halo 2 since one fan doesn't like the game at all. There are others that like your stories (and many many many many others that like Halo 2), so keep on writing. =P

  • 05.19.2004 3:58 PM PDT
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I know, I over react sometimes, and noone supported me after he joked. lol he liked it.

part three

"We came up through that door and saw the missing part of the building. We were really frightened, we were about to contact you when sudenly these red amphibious creatures came and attaked us. We held them off, but we were still out numbering them so If more of those things come, well let's just say I'm glad you're hear." Blue team leader said. "how many killed?" Green team leader said. "3 were killed, 1 was injured. If they out number us, we're all dead." Blue team leader said. "Well not really, If the covenant are still here that means we did not have the right equipment to take on these creatures. If we use heated weapons like them we could do good. Oh yeah, how about a name for these things?" You say. "Good idea, you are now a comander. And to answer your question, how about drout?" (lol, get it?) Red leader says

to be continued (quickly)

[Edited on 5/19/2004 4:11:37 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 3:59 PM PDT
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Oh and before I start part 4, do people really like my stories? I have to eat dinner but i promise you a part 4. No matter what people say about my writing. and again sry for over reacting.

  • 05.19.2004 4:13 PM PDT
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Sorry for the delay, I'll get right to part 4.


part 4

They all take out their rockets they move out across the swamp. They slowly walk across and hear a noise. "You hear that?" You say. "Yeah It came from ove- AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! Get it off! Somebody get it off!" Green leader says. Some dumb guy positions his rocket and says,"I got it!" He fires his rocket and hits the creature, it burns and falls down, To late to cool the fllame it stays there and dies. Luckily green leader wasn't injured. "You are way to lucky! If you had hit me! Well, you'd be a dead man. But I owe my life to your lucky shot spartan number?" Green leader says. "Spartan number 037 sir, and sorry for paniking you." He replies. "Well I hope that's the last of them hear-" You say when sudenly All the trees move and you see hundreds of them gathering on a hill. 50 rockets from the 60 spartans flew into them, about 100 burned but then more came up, counting thousands of them. 120 rockets flew this time, 2 from each spartan, went flying. "RETREAT!" You hear, but you argue saying wait, let's leave the nuke hear and run, it'll take all of them out, enough to give us time and report this information to UNSC headquarters. "Ok comander, good thinking. I'll leave the nuke, I'll time it for 30 seconds. SPARTANS! DROP YOUR WEAPONS AND SPRINT BACK TO BASE!" He leaves the nuke, you all sprint and make it back and survive the nuke. "Mission accomplished. We got data, and nuked them." you whisper.

YAY! I'ts done!

[Edited on 5/19/2004 4:41:27 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 4:25 PM PDT
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Just reply to my story please

[Edited on 5/19/2004 5:21:23 PM]

  • 05.19.2004 4:51 PM PDT
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This is cool but isin't their a fan fiction section?

  • 05.19.2004 5:55 PM PDT
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this is actually pretty good considering u just through this all together..good job

  • 05.19.2004 6:04 PM PDT
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Very Nice Liton, Me Like Lots

  • 05.19.2004 6:04 PM PDT
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Again thank you. I like seeing people liking my work

  • 06.07.2004 6:58 PM PDT
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If it was only longer.... but great story. Wish it could've gone more in depth, but that's just me.

  • 06.12.2004 9:43 AM PDT

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