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Subject: Halo: Unggoy Evolved (Fan-Fic)

"Men cry not for themselves, but their comrades."

"A hero need not speak. When he is gone, the world will speak for him."

Rare, great chapter! Although I'm a little disappointed about what you did to the Chief, I can't wait to see what you do in part 2! Keep up the great writing!

  • 06.03.2007 7:17 PM PDT
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Dat was cool. And Rare, let me know if you want to get started on a fan-fic together like you suggested.

  • 06.04.2007 7:25 PM PDT

As always, thanks for the feedback, everyone. Again, I'll announce as to when I'll begin posting chapters for Part 2 tomorrow (Which is also my B-Day. :D).

EDIT: Part 2 will begin on July 7th.

[Edited on 06.09.2007 10:11 AM PDT]

  • 06.08.2007 11:14 AM PDT
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Now that was good...let me know when part 2 is ready

  • 06.09.2007 9:40 PM PDT

Posted by: Spartan 232
Now that was good...let me know when part 2 is ready
I sure will (sorry for the bump).

Also, if Artemis and I do decide to write our own fan-fic, it'll most likely be posted in her group. However, i'll most likely post it in this forum as well. As for Part 2 of Halo: UE, I've come up with most of the ideas for the first few chapters. Again, I start postin' on July 7th. Still not sure if it'll be posted in this thread, though.

[Edited on 06.15.2007 9:18 AM PDT]

  • 06.15.2007 9:14 AM PDT

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I know i am late to the party, but i have to say is is the best fan-fic i have read and the best of your work.

  • 07.01.2007 7:30 PM PDT

Posted by: sparten110
I know i am late to the party, but i have to say is is the best fan-fic i have read and the best of your work.
Thanks, man!

Just as a reminder, people, the first chapter of Part 2 will be posted this Saturday. I've also decided that it'll be posted in this thread (as will Part 3).

  • 07.05.2007 10:45 PM PDT
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It teh Saturday! I am waiting . . . Patiently, of course.

  • 07.07.2007 12:39 PM PDT

Here's the first chapter of Part 2 for Halo: Unggoy Evolved. I hope y'all enjoy it.
Happy Bungie Day! =)

Halo: Unggoy Evolved

Part II

Chapter 1: Popcorn! Get Your Popcorn Here!

The Supreme Commander of the Fleet of Particular Justice stood before the three, noble Prophets, and the crowd surrounding him was completely silent (aside from a few short coughs in the back rows).
"There was only one ship.", the Sangheili said softly.
"One? Are you sure?", the Prophet of Truth asked from the middle of the group.
"Yes. They called it....the Pillar of Autumn."
"Why was it not destroyed," barked the Prophet of Mercy, who sat just left of Truth, "with the rest of their fleet?"
"It fled," answered the Commander "as we set fire to their planet.
"But I followed with all the ships in my command."
To the right of Truth sat the Prophet of Regret, who appeared in a beaconing, holographic form.
"When you first saw Halo, were you blinded by its majesty?", asked the Prophet.
"Blinded?"
"Paralyzed? Dumbstruck?"
"No.", replied the golden-clad Elite, who was begining to feel irritated.
"Yet the humans were able to evade your ships," Regret said "land on the Sacred Ring, and desecrate it with their filthy footsteps?"
"Noble Heirarchs....surely you understand that once the parasite attacked...."
Not two seconds later, nearly the entire council chamber burst into the shouting. However, they quickly became quiet once the Prophet of Mercy slammed his left wrist on the arm of his chair.
"There will be order in this council!", the light-haired Prophet exclaimed. Shortly after, Truth began scooting his chair closer to the Elite.
"You were right to focus your attention on the Flood, but this Demon, this 'Master Chief'...."
"By the time I learned the Demon's intent," the Sangheili replied "there was nothing I could do."
Once again, the Council erupted, and in the darkened corner of the chamber, the Jiralhanae known as Tartarus-with his hands across his chest-was chuckling to himself.
To keep the Council members from becoming angry once again, Regret leaned closer toward Truth and whispered "Prophet of Truth, this has gone on long enough. Make an example of this bungler. The Council demands it.".
Truth nodded, raised his right hand towards the Council, and said to the Commander "You are one of our most cherished instruments. Long have you led your fleet with honor and distinction, but your inability to safeguard Halo....was a colossal failure."
A split-second later, a Council Prophet shot upward from his seat, raised his fist, and shouted, "Nay, it was heresy!"
Once more, the chamber was filled with angry shouts until the Commander interupted "I will continue my campaign against the humans."
"No!" Truth exclaimed "You will not."
Suddenly, a pair of vicious Brutes crept from the shadows, grabbed the golden-clad Elite by his hands, and lead him toward the door at the other end of the chamber.
"Soon the Great Journey shall began." the Hierarch told him "But when it does, the weight of your heresy will stay your feet, and you shall be left behind."

Approximately five minutes later, the Commander and the Jiralhanae holding onto him arrived at an enormous chamber, with a fairly large crowd of Unggoy, Kig-Yar, and Lekgolo facing toward the Commander. The Unggoy, specifically, were all cheering "Heretic! Heretic! Heretic!". When the reached the end of the crowd, the Brutes stopped at a dias infront of an enormous dropoff. Below them all were crowds of thousands gathering to watch.
"You've drawn quite a crowd.", said Tartarus, looking straight at the Elite.
"If they came to hear me beg," the Commander replied "they will be disappointed."
"Are you sure?"
Near the front of the crowd behind the golden-clad Sangheili were a group of Unggoy who had just returned from yet another life-changing experience. They were, of course, part of what used to be known as the Grunt Squad of Five. Each of them wore their own suit of black-colored armor.
"Man, this is gonna be good!", said Silco.
"You know it! I've been looking forward to this for months!", replied Pillow.
"Hey, have any of you seen Sarge?", Fisca asked, scanning through the crowd for a look at their crimson-armored leader.
"He said he had something to take care of first.", said Pillow, "Not sure what, though."
"Yeah, well, he'd better hurry up. I think it's about to start!"

The Seraph-class starfighter zoomed toward the UNSC Orbital Defense Platform known as Cairo Station. As it latched itself to the facility, a legion of Unggoy poured out of the aircraft, the last of which was the Grunt Sargeant himself.
"Alright, boys, get that thing open!", he barked, pointing toward the bulkhead door infront of them.
"Grunty brother, the bomb has been armed.", said a Grunt through the Sargeant's COM.
"Nice job, son!", the crimson-armored Unggoy said.
As the Grunts began their work on the bulkhead, the Sargeant faced toward them and said, "Alright, boys, as soon as that door opens, let 'em have it!"

  • 07.07.2007 6:50 PM PDT

Your back! Great chapter can't wait for the others.

  • 07.07.2007 7:13 PM PDT

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great start. oh by the way i will be gone untill friday so let me know if you put up any more chapters before then.

  • 07.08.2007 5:16 AM PDT
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Sweet.

  • 07.09.2007 7:12 AM PDT

No soldier should be honored for doing what is expected
of him. He is after all, just doing his job.

Posted by: the green grunt
(|__/) This....This is bunny
(x..X) Keslo Killed it
('') ('') what a nice guy

Yes, it's BACK!!

  • 07.09.2007 10:40 AM PDT
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"Shortly after, Truth began scooting his chair closer to the Elite."

That brings a pretty strange image to my mind.
Can't you hear the legs of the chair screeching across the floor?

I like the Sarges lines . . . That was cool.

  • 07.09.2007 12:26 PM PDT

Posted by: DeeJ
Why don't you just give me ONE SECOND!

YAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • 07.09.2007 9:56 PM PDT
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another encounter with MC is drawing nearer....

  • 07.10.2007 9:44 PM PDT

Thanks for the comments, everyone! I'm glad to see that most of y'all are still interested in this fan-fic, heh. However, there may not be a new chapter this Saturday, as I am currently outta town, and probably won't have the time to post it. I'll be returnin' home on Tuesday, so Chapter 2 will most likely be posted next Wednesday.

  • 07.11.2007 3:20 PM PDT

A bit early for a new chapter, eh? :D

Chapter 2: Tell Me Again Why I Paid for These

The bulkhead bursted open, as waves of sub-machine-gun fire slammed into the legion of Unggoy.
"We're all gonna die!", shouted a Grunt, whom of which was beaten down by a Marine not more than two seconds later.
"Yeah, now back to jackass world, jackass!", the Marine spat to the now deceased Grunt.
"Keep the lead pumpin', Marines!", barked Sargeant Avery Johnson, who was in command of a machine-gun turret above a small flight of stairs behind the whole brewhaha.
"Err, fellas," the Grunt Sargeant said through the COM link, "We're gonna need some assistance."

Within seconds, the Supreme Commander was stripped of his gold-plated armor, his hands trapped within a pair of floating restraints. Two orange energy beams came shooting out of the wall, toward the Sangheili's wrists. The Commander shot out with a cry of pain.
After nearly a minute, the orange beams died, and the Sangheili fell on his knees. Tartarus waved his left hand, as two Jiralhanae came forward, lifted his arms over their shoulders, and dragged the naked warrior out of the chamber. Seconds later, the silence of the crowd was broken.
"Man, that sucked!", barked Silco.
"I know," replied Pillow "especially after what I paid to get front-row seats to this thing."
Not too long after the Grunts were finished ranting over the extreme disappointment of the event, an Elite Honor Guard aproached them. In terms of their armor layout, these Sangheili were quite different from their generally blue-armored counterparts. They wore red helmets and underarmor with fairly large, orange plates sticking into the air.
"Unggoy, the Prophets of Truth and Mercy wish to speak with you. Come, this way.", said the Honor Guard. The Sangheili moved forward, and the now confused Unggoy followed.

The Grunt Sargeant, who was currently under fire, took cover behind a large chunk of the bulkhead's remains.
"Alright, that's it! It's time to stop runnin' and start kickin' some ass!", the crimson-armored Unggoy said, "One....Two....Three!"
The Grunt Sargeant shot out of cover, though by the time he entered the chamber, all of his troops were dead. About nine feet infront of him stood a machine-gun turret, where Sargeant Johnson grinned wickedly at the Grunt. However, an Unggoy's corpse was then thrown out behind a mildly large control panel, and following was a soldier with dark green armor and a gold-plated visor. This, of course, was none other than the Master Chief.
"Oh, you've gotta be kiddin' me!"

  • 07.13.2007 8:03 PM PDT

"Men cry not for themselves, but their comrades."

"A hero need not speak. When he is gone, the world will speak for him."

Dude, sweet chapters! Sorry I haven't posted in a while, but I just keep forgetting to log into Bnet. Nice introduction of the Chief as well! Keep it up!

  • 07.13.2007 9:40 PM PDT

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that chapter was awseom

  • 07.14.2007 10:01 AM PDT
Subject: Halo: Unggoy Evolved (Fan-Fic; Part Two Begins on Pg. 12)

Whoa, Bnet sure has a lot of good fan-fics. I recon a fan-fic forum would help. I doubt there would be enough for a whole forum though.

  • 07.14.2007 10:11 AM PDT
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Can't wait to see what happens next!

  • 07.14.2007 2:32 PM PDT

Posted by: Sludgee
Can't wait to see what happens next!

  • 07.14.2007 5:50 PM PDT
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Posted by: DeeJ
Why don't you just give me ONE SECOND!

Awesome!

  • 07.14.2007 9:29 PM PDT