- last post: 01.01.0001 12:00 AM PDT
My only suggestion is to plug more adjectives in, rather than "I did this; the Brute jumped on top of that". For example, "The Brute chieftan, his scarred, torn armor glinting in the raw, harsh sunlight, scoffed and grunted, "This, human...is where you meet your death!".
[Edited on 1/30/2007]